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  • John Smith


  • charles81

    Insignificante image adjustment: Consider making Nataku’s pinky a little more stunted in Panel 2.

    • suburban_samurai

      Charles, this has been a huge help! We expected small grammatical correction notes, but having a reader as dedicated to the storytelling as you is going to greatly improve the flow of the book. We intent to implementing the vast majority of the changes you suggest, because they are excellent. I don’t even know how to thank you for the input, it’s invaluable!

    • jwkovell

      Pinky stuntafied and panels moved for better readability.


  • Aetre

    proofreading note: should be a comma after “Enough” in panel 4. This makes it a direct address instead of a statement of amount. “I’ve had enough, Atsumori. (I don’t want to hear any more.)” vs. “I’ve had enough Atsumori. (I couldn’t eat another bite…)”

    • jwkovell

      Got it. Thanks!

  • Da’Zlein

    Maybe some day he’ll start listening to his adviser and will actually make a good decision…

    • Kid Chaos

      Unfortunately, Atsumori is outnumbered 2-to-1 by Nataku and Eijiro (3-to-1 if you count Hirotomo’s raging paranoia). :(

      • User Unknown

        His paranoia is so great, it counts as its own person!

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